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Ghada Award for Young Writers/Second Annual Contest 2011
12-02-2011, 08:17 PM |
عائشة موسي السعيد
عائشة موسي السعيد
Registered: 07-10-2010
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Re: Ghada Award for Young Writers/Second Annual Contest 2011 (Re: عائشة موسي السعيد)
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*Evocative and gentle prose. You take a simple memory and bring it to life with careful descriptive prose. This is what good writing does. A very promising voice.
*Well written, articulate and powerful writing capturing the contradictions and conflicts of modern life.
*Despite a rather blunt ending, a well written, passionate and intelligent essay is constructed. I would have liked to hear more detail of Sudan itself -the culture, the landscape to help contextualise the argument a little more fully. Nevertheless, there is a strong personal voice here which is to be commended. *Some powerful phrases and a sensitive voice is emerging here. It needs reigning in - simplify to ensure the purity of the emotion is not lost
*This is a very difficult piece to write. To be , or to write as one, grieving for a sibling so loved and so missed. A brave and emotional response that really captures the feelings of powerlessness and loss.
*A funny , bittersweet story. It capture the "teen" voice quite well here. My advice- read lots of examples of this genre (Jaqueline Wilson is the most famous) and watch how she sets the scene and how she structures her dialogue.
*A funny, lively opening to a novel
*You record some powerful messages here. I think they would benefit from a tighter control of the form and structure
*A well written if rather bleak reading
*A sweet tale - every girl's dream -to be rescued.
*A brave effort at a poetic form. Keep reading poetry to improve your own style
*A good try which brings to life something that we take for granted in the West - education.
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The above are comments to our Young Creative Writers of English texts participating in the secong GAFYW contest. Written by member of evaluation committee Ms Maggie Hazeldine.
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Ghada Award for Young Writers/Second Annual Contest 2011 | عائشة موسي السعيد | 07-24-11, 07:13 PM |
Re: Ghada Award for Young Writers/Second Annual Contest 2011 | عائشة موسي السعيد | 07-24-11, 07:32 PM |
Re: Ghada Award for Young Writers/Second Annual Contest 2011 | عائشة موسي السعيد | 07-25-11, 10:59 AM |
Re: Ghada Award for Young Writers/Second Annual Contest 2011 | عائشة موسي السعيد | 07-27-11, 05:32 PM |
Re: Ghada Award for Young Writers/Second Annual Contest 2011 | عائشة موسي السعيد | 07-28-11, 11:31 AM |
Re: Ghada Award for Young Writers/Second Annual Contest 2011 | عائشة موسي السعيد | 12-01-11, 08:24 AM |
Re: Ghada Award for Young Writers/Second Annual Contest 2011 | عائشة موسي السعيد | 12-02-11, 07:57 PM |
Re: Ghada Award for Young Writers/Second Annual Contest 2011 | عائشة موسي السعيد | 12-02-11, 08:17 PM |
Re: Ghada Award for Young Writers/Second Annual Contest 2011 | عائشة موسي السعيد | 12-03-11, 05:48 PM |
Re: Ghada Award for Young Writers/Second Annual Contest 2011 | عائشة موسي السعيد | 12-03-11, 06:08 PM |
Re: Ghada Award for Young Writers/Second Annual Contest 2011 | عائشة موسي السعيد | 12-03-11, 06:47 PM |
Re: Ghada Award for Young Writers/Second Annual Contest 2011 | عائشة موسي السعيد | 12-05-11, 07:56 PM |
Re: Ghada Award for Young Writers/Second Annual Contest 2011 | عائشة موسي السعيد | 12-06-11, 09:37 AM |
Re: Ghada Award for Young Writers/Second Annual Contest 2011 | عائشة موسي السعيد | 12-22-11, 05:29 PM |
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